So here is the play-blast with most of the changes that were brought up in the meeting last Friday. I believe I have incorporated all of the recommendations that you had made and this should be appropriate for you to develop your voice over. In the play-blast below, there were a couple of problems with the oil system, it started later than I expected, and some of the particles were traveling both too high and too wide. I have changed a few more things and those should be fixed I will update this post with a new playblast as soon as I can.
Edit: Here is the corrected version of the play-blast.